人與自然和諧相處
can people live in harmony with nature
man and nature are interactive (相互作用的) forces.
looking back along the river of history, we may find that harmony used to exist between people and nature. at that time nature was pure field to be ploughed, sown and harvested. man respected nature and was one part of nature.
it seems that people today are masters of natureg nature is torn into pieces. while we are disrupting(破壞) the order of the natural world, we are the ultimate victims, for nature is seeking its revenge(報復). disappearing forests, drying rivers, polluted soil and worsening climate have punished greedy human beings. we have taken too much from nature, and given back too little.
looking forward to the future, when we gain reasoning, when we remember the deep interdependent relationship between people and nature, when citizens of the world work persistently to protect nature, then nature will be our friend instead of our slave or servant. sure, people can live in harmony with nature, with commitment, hard work and new technology.
核心剖析 按照提綱設計，本論述文的表達結構是線性的。引占以公認的哲學原理man and natureare interactive forces開頭，中間穿插了大量有說服力的細節，文章最後連用了三個“when從句”強調人與自然和諧相處的必要條件。整個展開提綱過程是以論據證明觀點正確的邏輯推理過程。全文寫作基於提綱，但不拘泥於提綱，嚴謹與靈活的把握使文章 ‘脈相承、內容豐滿。