A Spring Outing
Spring came with all its glories. The new grass exposed its green colour. The pretty flowers opened their blossoms.We were tempted to go for an outing.
It was Sunday, the 20th of April. We set out very early on bikes, carrying bottles of champagne, beer and bags of cakes, bacon and cooked eggs. We rode along the winding paths in the fields, across the meadows and down the roads.The willow were fresh and green. The swallows were flying to and fro, up and down the sky. The birds, like musicians,snang their melodious songs in the trees, and the butterflies,like colorful dancers, were fluttering here and there. We breathed the fresh air deeply and laughed heartily.
At 10 a.m. we arrived at the foot of the $hushan Hill.We left our bikes with a bike-repairing shop and began to climb up the Hill. Near the top, under a big tree with luxuriant foliage we had our picnic. We drank and ate, talked and laughed. After the picnic we stood in the breeze with our hands on our waists, enjoying the fine landscape. Then we lay on the grass talking about our life and studies.
At about 4 p. m. , we returned with balmy greenness on our backs and freshness in our hearts.
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這篇記敘文除了敘述清楚了時間、地點、人物和事件外，還對春天的美景作了一番描述，而這美妙的一切正是他們去春遊的原因，因此也就引出他們去春遊的結果。文章構思巧妙，語言簡潔而充滿詩情畫意。隻是篇幅稍長。考試時由于時間所限，構思時一定要把握住文章的長度。
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春遊
春天來了，帶著無限的嬌美。小草，已露出嫩綠色，花已開放了，我們怎麽能不去郊遊!
那是4月20號，星期天。一大早，我們帶著香檳酒、啤酒、蛋糕、鹹薰肉和雞蛋，騎著腳踏車出發了!我們沿著鄉間彎彎曲曲小道，穿過草地走向大道。嫩綠的楊柳掛在路旁，燕子在天空飛來飛去，鳥兒在樹上歌唱，彩蝶到處飛舞。我們深深地呼吸著新鮮的空氣，盡情地放聲大笑。
上午10點鍾，我們到達墅山腳下。我們將腳踏車寄放在一家腳踏車修理鋪，然後開始爬山。我們在靠近山頂，一棵茂密的大樹下坐下來開始野餐。我們慢慢地吃著，喝著，說著，笑著。野餐後，我們雙手叉腰，站立在微風中，享受著美麗的景色。隨後我們躺在草地上，談論著我們的生活和學習。
大約在下午4點我們帶著芬芳的綠色，心中裝著清新，精神抖擻踏上返回的征途。