2003年6月考試四級作文題：An Eye-Witness Account of a Traffic Accident
假設你在某日某時某地目擊一起車禍，就此寫一份見證書。
見證書須包括以下幾點：
1、車禍發生的時間及地點;
2、你所見到的車禍情況;
3、你對車禍原因的分析。
例1. (2分段)
At 9:00, Jan. 20, 2003, I eye-witness a traffic accident in Dongfang Street.
I see that a(an) old people is hitted (hit)by a car.
In my opinion, the rapid driver is the main reason, but the old people also has his error.
東方教育點評：(1)字數明顯不夠，盡管都點題了，但隻有三句話。
(2)有文法錯誤。
例2.(5分段)
In my opinion, the driver of Benz auto should be blamed on(for) the traffic accident. It was his drunk driving that resulted in this accident.
It is not(no) doubt that the traffic accident is a high(hot) topic in the modern(modern) society, different people have different attitude (attitudes) to this.
When it come(comes) to the accident, people think it responsible for the driver. But last Sunday I see(saw) a(an) accident. A woman crossed a street when a car turn(turned at) the crossing .it is too late to stop the car ,The women was bad(badly) hurt. The people who was walking along the street took the woman to hospital, (and) the driver came with them.
As far as (I am) concerned, the both sides have responsibility for this, begin(at the beginning), the woman shouldnot cross the street. Forthemore, the driver should pay more attention. Last. we should take proper measure .Only (when) we take the measure and we (become) more careful can we have a colorful (life) tomorrow.
東方教育點評：(1)本文基本切題。
(2)但有的地方表達思想不清楚，層次不夠清楚。如第二段把描述車禍情況和發生原因混為一談，而最後一段的總結又很牽強。
(3)全文有比較多的語言錯誤，而且有些是嚴重的錯誤。
例3.(8分段)
At 9:00am October 25st(25th) 2003, I saw a traffic accident on Daxue Road. At that time, I was on my way to school.
When I turned right on the corner, a motorbike knocked into a small car. The motorbike was red, and there are(were) two persons on the motorbike. The car was yellow. The motorbike fell down, and the two persons on the motorbike were slight injured. The (car) driver came out of the car at once, and asked about the two persons. As soon as I saw that, I made a telephone call to 110.The traffic police arrived in a short time.
According to what I saw, I thought there may be one reason leading to the accident. That was the motorbike kept too short (a) distant from the car. When the car slowed down, the motorbike couldn"t slow down in time. So the accident took place.
東方教育點評：(1)基本切題。
(2)文字連貫性不強，尤其是第二段，缺少一些必要的銜接詞。
(3)簡單句太多，可以考慮把一些合並成復合句。
(4)有些地方人稱指代不明(如司機)，容易引起誤解
(5)有一些基本的時態、文法錯誤。
例4.(11分段)
Last Friday afternoon, when I was on my way home, a traffic accident took place at the crossing of Shanghai Road.
A pupil was knocked down by a black car when he was walking across the street. His legs were badly hurt. Sever(Several) minutes later an ambulance came, and the driver of the black car sent the pupil to the hospital immediately.
In my eyes, this accident was due to that the pupil broke the traffic rules. That is to say, the pupil walked across the street when the traffic lights were red. As soon as the driver saw the pupil, he stopped the car, however, it was too late. In my opinion, it was necessary to advocate people to confirm to the traffic rules. If the pupil hadn"t broken the traffic rules, the accident might not have happened.
東方教育點評：(1)本文比較切題，表達思想清楚。
(2)語句比較通順，但有少量語言錯誤。
例5.(14分段)
My name is Liming. I am studying at college. A week ago I saw a traffic accident , which is still vivid in my mind.