What Unemployment Brings to China
Fifteen years ago, the word "unemployment" was regarded as the most estranged word and the patent of capitalism. It is all of a sudden for millions of Chinese workers, especially in textile,to find that their ever well profited factories nearly bankrupt and themselves unemployed. Some criticize it as a cruel killer to the security of society. However, the advantages of "unemployment", in my opinion, outweigh the disadvantages in the long
To begin with, "unemployment" readjusts the industrial structure of the state-owned enterprises, which shows more and more defects. It is undeniable that products made in China have less competitive power compared with imported ones. Because the whole structure of our industry is labour intensive, which is now tangled with high cost and low efficiency. The first initiative to solve the problem, ruthless but useful, is to cut down the extra workers, which, in effect, save some dying enterprises from the edge of bankruptcy and enhance their efficiency and competitiveness.
"Unemployment" in some traditional industries, on the contrary, stimulates the development of some new industries, such as service industry, which create many jobs for those layoffs,which, in turn, stimulate the industry to prosper, as becomes an increasingly important part of the social economy.
Another profound influence "unemployment" brings is that it has uprooted the traditional outdated modes of thought, carved in our minds, fiercely and thoroughly, that a lifelong job no longer exists. The era of planned economy has come to its end.Tough competition has terminated the security of job and one should prepare himself for the corresponding transformation of society. "Run, or lose" becomes the golden rule of commodity economy. Amazingly, more and more layoffs took the lesson,made proper adjustment and then find themselves new positions.
"Unemployment", as an unavoidable economic phenomenon, is pounding on our out dated social system strongly. It is like a rainstorm that uproots the traditional modes of thought and brings life to the diversified industries, transforming the traditional industries and washing away the deep-rooted but outdated thoughts. Face it properly and we will have a shining future.
簡 評
失業下崗作為市場經濟一個不可回避的現象，成為經濟體製改革的熱點。如何看待下崗現象，失業下崗的積極作用何在，這是文章所要告訴我們的。
習作的結構緊湊，論說有力。樂穎毅同學能把失業下崗的現象和服務業在市場經濟架構下的蓬勃發展聯系起來看，找出其中的邏輯關系和互動性。並且指出這些事實和現象的背後是更深一層的思想形態的變革，是舊的思維模式的破碎和新的模式的確立。
這樣就構成了一個完整的論述，在最後一段把“失業”比作暴風雨，正以其強大的勢頭，沖刷著長期以來的傳統觀點，把論述推向了高潮。
文章的構思新穎，謀篇巧妙，段與段之間有緊密的邏輯關系，使整個論述顯得簡潔、有力。但不足的是每一點上的論述應再細化深入一點，有些用詞表達不夠準確、生動。