My First Year in College
Many high school graduates wrongly assume that university life is totally free from worries. After a period of serious and solemn study in senior three, the hard beavers expect to take a break and develop some habits. However, many may find later that the situation may be beyond their anticipation.
I've tried to convince the adults around that the image they have of my university life as a free and unrestrained one is some what misunderstanding. In reality, school life is so busy that I sometimes wonder if my energy is enough.
About my first year in college, my life is mainly made up of two parts, study and practice. As a student, the main task is study. In order to gain a high GPA, I have to get used to the college life style and begin a new pursue in study. It is the learning method that shows off most of the differences between senior study and college study. ! have a roommate who goes out to have lessons in the morning and comes back in the evening after the self-study classroom is closed. The peers' behaviors make me feel under pressure. In university, one% view of life is integrally formed and strengthened. I begin to program my future plan and realize that study itself is an affair for me. The more courses I learn by heart, the more maturity I get. University education ensures students of better jobs. I usually reckon that time consuming on study is worthwhile as it bears such important events as occupation, career and responsibility.
To some extent, study and practice are intertwined, and they begin from the very start of freshman year. Student Union enjoys almost complete acceptance. It is a place where one can get his ability trained, have his competence applied and make a lot of friends who share the same interests with him. But sometimes, social activities and practices are time consuming, what's more, the sense of responsibility also requires you to make effort to fulfill the task.
No one starts in one's present position all along that it was what he or she wants to do. Sometimes, the chance will just lead you down some unforeseen trail only if you have a prepared mind. My first year in college is not relaxed, but all way along is full of curiosity and satisfaction.
簡 評
通過這篇作文，我們看到了一個值得佩服的女大學生，學習努力，又積極參與社會實踐，具有明確的人生目標，大一的生活過得充實而幸福。
從intertwine，time consuming，reckon等辭彙可以看得出來，作者的語言功底較為扎實，辭彙的使用準確而地道。作者從學習和實踐兩個方面進行闡述，並在末尾進行了總結，對文章開頭進行了呼應，顯示了作者嫻熟的寫作手法。
不過，從標題來看，這篇文章應當是寫作者對大一的總結和感受。論述提綱也是如此，但作者有點過于註重論證，去justify自己各方面的行為，而非從內心自我的角度出發去談自己的感受，作者除了在第二段用了幾個I作為句子的主語以外，文章的其餘部分幾乎沒有用I或my，反而是用了幾次you，這樣顯得客觀有餘，親切不足，是本文的美中不足之處。