The Life in Fudan
Fudan University is claimed to position the third in China.Given a chance to study in Fudan as an exchange student for one semester, I carried my luggage with excitement and aspired to having a fruitful semester in Fudan.
But when I reached the campus, I was shocked by the first sight of my room.
The room is shared by six students with only two tables and without any air-conditioning system. The toilet is unbearably dirty, with flies and mosquitoes, germs and bacteria. The most unbelievable thing is that all students in a hostel share one bath room and all of us have to wash our clothes by ourselves.What's more, there is no access to the Internet and not any TV in our dormitory.
By then, I realized how fortunate I was being a Hong Kong student.
Instead of complaining, I was simply confused about the way students adapt their lives to such an environment. I doubt my ability of adaptation as I am the kind of students, who are easily succumbing to and beaten by difficulties.
But after living with my classmates a few weeks, I am proud that I gradually get used to the life here and consider the poor environment as a challenge to me. In fact, no students in the faculty are immune from the kind of life here. Those who are younger than me can live happily here, so can I. They can concentrate on their studies here, why can't I? There are no clean toilets, no washing machines and no air-conditioning system, but at least I have electricity and fans to stay cool; I have water and hands to wash clothes, which is already enough.
If I had lived in hostel where we have a separate bathroom for each room, I would not have had the chance to build up relationship between students from different rooms in times of washing clothes and taking shower. The life here is a unique experience.
In addition, the most precious lesson I learn from students here is their attitudes of studying. They are so devoted and industrious that they get up so early in the morning, queuing for a seat in the library or studying in classroom till late at night.Students are determined to achieve their far-sighted target, like continuing their studies as postgraduates. Besides, the students here possess knowledge of different areas instead of simply focusing on one specific area.
Studying and living with them is a priceless and inspiring lesson to me, a surprise to me that causes me to treasure the things I have, even some minor things which I took it for granted. I am sure that the coming year will be a fruitful one.
簡 評
作為一名香港交流學生，梁佳義同學從自己獨特的視角看到了我們習以為常的事物。他先是對大陸大學生們的生活條件表示驚詫，然後是困惑，進而逐步適應。先是對復旦學子們的勤奮欽佩不已，進而下定決心努力學習。作者以細致的筆觸娓娓講述了自己的思想歷程。
香港基本上是一個雙語社會，英語教學比較發達，學生們學習英語具有得天獨厚的條件，梁佳義同學就向我們展示了過硬的語言功底。一方面，作者的語言流暢、地道，例如片語如immune from，succumb to等的使用就格外引人註目，因為這些地道的搭配和表達方式往往在大陸大學生作文中很難找到。另一方面，作者在文章中表達了自己的真實感受，比如使用shocked來描述自己初到新的生活環境的感受，又接連使用了兩個so來表達自己對復旦學子的勤奮學習的無比欽佩，顯得坦率而真誠。
當然，段落清晰，結構分明，也是本文的一大優點。可能是出于個人寫作風格，作者有點偏愛排比的修辭手段，但對同義詞的排比如germs and bacteria，devoted and industrious等最好適當控製，語言就更上一層樓了。