My Father
My father always stands in the center of my life, from past till now and possibly in the future.
My family was rather poor when I was in my childhood. We didn"t have our own house and had to live in a shabby, small room rented from my father"s factory. The room was so small that there was little space for people to walk. I didn"t have my own bed and had to sleep with my parents. This is terrible both for my parents and me.
But father made this all different! Since the room was on the third floor, namely, the top floor in that old style building, the roof was quite high above the floor. So father got an idea. He bought two thick ropes and a flat wood that later was planed smooth, painted and drilled two holes on both ends.
Then he hung the ends of ropes up to the roof. During the daytime, these two ropes would be tied up so that people down could walk freely! When night came, father would loose the ropes and tied them to the two holes of that flat wood. The length of these ropes was just long enough for me to sit or sleep on the board without other"s help.
So in this way my lovely, removable bed was born.
When winter came, this special bed obviously wouldn"t be able to make me feel warm enough. But father always had his so lution! He built a garret using some flat wood and iron sticks right above the bed. With some used iron tubes, he made an iron ladder for us to climb up to the garret. Besides, he made a wood en desk for me to do my homework, and some simple furniture for my clothes, books and something else he had in fact made a small bedroom for me.
At first, my mother and I dared not climb for fear that it might collapse. But father climbed it everyday to prove its safety. The garret looked simple even shabby and the ladder seemed to decline soon. But later when I got used to it, I found it as solid as those made by professional carpenters.
I carried all my personal things onto that garret. My father and I pasted red papers on the wall and painted the ugly furniture red. So the garret became the first "room" that belonged to me.When I was about to move to my new house, I just didn"t want to leave. That garret was created with my father"s love and sweat and intelligence, beautified with my hand and filled with so many sweet memories of my family! That hard but sweet life time would live in my memory forever with father stands in the center of it.
簡 評
一個貧寒的家庭。一個充滿愛心又能幹的父親。一張父親製作的簡易木床。一個記憶中永遠溫馨的臥房。描寫父愛可以從很多方面入手，可以寫很多很多。應該說，這篇文章的語言並沒有多少特殊之處。之所以感人至深，是因為這篇文章的選材：集中筆墨寫父親製作的簡易木床。這就是突出中心的好處。一滴水可以折射出太陽的光輝;一張木床也可以反映偉大的父愛。父母之愛如三春朝暉無處不在，生活中的任何一點小事都足以將他們對兒女的愛表達得淋漓盡致。其實，想多寫，又怎麽寫得盡?
(點評教師：汪中平)