My English Teacher-我的英語老師
Mr Shao taught me English when I was in Senior Three.With the bald head and hunchback, the fifty or some man distinguished himself from his counterparts in many ways.
He was so addicted to tobacco that he couldn"t even skip acigarette in the corridor at the interval between two classes. Due to the long time consumption of cigarettes, his teeth had gone totally bad and occasionally let off unpleasant smell which really disturbed us when we were talking to him. At times, he came to recognize it and consequently found out a solution. He suggested we write down our problems and he answer them in the written form. Although I knew all along that he was a careful man, his quotations of five different dictionaries on a single multiple choice problem was still beyond my wildest dream.
What"s more, none of us could imagine how excellent his ancient Chinese literature was. What he tended to do in his class was to recite several segments of the famous ancient prose and then put them into English. However, under the pressure of College Entrance Exam, the students didn"t seem to be so interested in his performance. Therefore, he tried to stimulate the class by editions of Times as prizes for answering questions. It worked on us instantly.
On the day of the entrance exam, he waited nervously with us out of the examination room. He kept reminding us not to drink water in case that we would feel like going to toilet during the exam. Not withstanding his constant claims that we students were far less important than his beloved daughter, we did feel his devotion to us.
簡 評
這是一篇生動的人物素描。僅寥寥數百字，一個踏實嚴謹，循循善誘，體貼入微的慈父般的老教師形象便躍然紙上。
作者對細節的描寫令人印象深刻。通篇沒有一句評論或贊美之辭，隻是敘述了日常生活中的點滴小事，表現出教師對學生無微不至的關懷。如老師怕身上的煙味熏著學生，提議用書面交流;為鼓勵學生擴大英語知識面，巧用有獎問答作獎勵;聯考前反復叮囑等，真實可信，感人至深。結尾處貌似隨意提到老師把女兒和學生做比較，巧妙的體現出教師愛生如子的樸素情懷。文章文風樸實，語句通暢，用詞準確，表現力很強。
(點評教師：辛紅葉)